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I wrote my story that began in childhood. But I couldn’t write it in the first person, as is typical in memoirs. So I wrote it how I felt at the time, as a person looking back in time, in the third person. Because it felt feels like an out of body experience.

I released chapters out of order. (Removed January 2020)

– The little girl with the enormous headache Chapter 1 (3 minute read)
– The little girl with the enormous headache chapter 13 (3 minute read)

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  1. This pulled me in…has piqued my interest. Like other commenters, I look forward to more.
    As for point of view, the person telling the story has to go with what feels right to them. When I started writing, I felt more comfortable with 1st person. Later on, I used 3rd. Now, I use whichever the story tells me to. To each his own.

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    1. Isn’t this interesting! Thank you for your comment. ๐Ÿ™‚ I have put it on hold, I have so many other things going through my mind, but I find with this particular story, when it hits me, I just type and type. You can probably understand this since you’ve been writing on and off for a while, too…as I’ve discovered. ๐Ÿ™‚

      Thank you for reading.

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    1. Thank you! I have lots more chapters but I’m so…not into it right now. Working on a different project which I am at the point of wanting to toss into a fire (if I had a fire place)…lol. But thank you. This is very encouraging. I will let you know when I pick it up again. ๐Ÿ™‚


  2. Iโ€™ve recently read two popular memoirs and am currently reading another one. All of them are told first person and I kind of like the detachment of the way you use third person. Itโ€™s different and thatโ€™s interesting to me. Iโ€™m not sure itโ€™s sustainable for an entire memoir so if you switch to first person along the way, I suggest explaining why you began describing your childhood memory as though it belonged to someone else.

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  3. This drew me inโ€ฆto want more. Iโ€™ll await chapter two.

    Like Karen, though, I question the use of third person.

    Also, I suggest avoiding usage of the word โ€œvery.โ€ Instead, qualify that with details. What is a โ€œvery bad headache?โ€ Yes, the editor in me emerges.

    Please continue writing and rewriting and shaping this into the compelling story that has already snagged my interest.

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    1. Thank you for your feedback. I have many ideas, and a lot if chapters written, including a switch to the adult voice. We’ll see how this continues over the next month’s. ๐Ÿ’Ÿ


  4. I can see tension and also implications for later life decisions.

    For example how the little girlโ€™s understanding of how her mother reacted, โ€œyouโ€™re getting to big to carry,โ€ might have an over sensitive child choose reactions later in life that over-exaggerate the feeling of being a burden etc.

    Or the mysterious outing the Mom had. Was it really mysterious? We donโ€™t need to know at all, but it sure makes me curious and opens the door for a completely different narrative, book, story. How does the Mom see the story? What angst did she go through? And what self-blaming and condemnation did she or even does she go through?

    Finally, how does this story effect the little girl today? The repercussions in health (I know a bit of the story) but also: how she navigates parenting? Makes important decisions?

    I think there are many areas to explor next and you build the curiosity very well. Thank you for sharing!

    When do we get chapter two?

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      1. Of course you didn’t. Thank you for taking the time to respond…I wish I remember walking on the actual hill, but I don’t. I mean, I remember walking up and down it every day under normal circumstances, but the day of the headache, I don’t remember the effort of that part of the walk. Hm…

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      2. Okay I wanted to make sure. Thatโ€™s understandable that you wouldnโ€™t remember . How did it feel on those days hard ? If so the headache can make the hill have seem easier because the pain taking away from the climb . Once again my opinion . Keep going so interested in reading more. ๐Ÿ™‚

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  5. It’s not that I dislike it – I say keep it for now, if that’s what feels right for you. It may give your memoir a distinct feel from others. You may be able to add, perhaps in the next chapter, just what you said above – that you felt like you were watching it from the outside – from an adult perspective.

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    1. I switch to first person later in the book… it’s an unrefined idea, to change the voice. One I’m still developing.

      I don’t know how to answer this. When the words tumbled out, it was like I was watching myself as a little girl from an adult perspective. It’s hard to explain…..

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